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Maurice Molyneaux

Deep Space Nine

Excerpt from Design Document

Rescued from Circular File...

This is a complete section of the Deep Space Nine design which was deleted when the "CAPTIVE PURSUIT" module of the game was cut for memory reasons.

As I designed it, this was to be the most character-interactive part of the game. The player would have to talk to everyone, figure out who needed what, and then barter his way to the device needed to advance to the next action stage.

What follows is a "script" of character interaction, conveying what each character on the station will say to the player-character (first Sisko, then O'Brien) when approached. The other characters responses to them change as the stage progresses and the player has gathered information and items.

For example, when the script reads--

Garak at the entrance to his shop [chip for yamok sauce]:

--then the following responses will only occur if the player has obtained the chip for the yamok sauce (or spoken to the indicated character, etc.).

Finally, the somewhat truncated nature of the character dialogues is a direct result of the limited area in which text could appear. To keep things clear, wherever possible I wrote complete sentences that would fit within the limits of the display field.

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Deep Space Nine, 3rd Draft Story Treatment -- 11 May 94
Promenade 5
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Begins in Sisko's office.
--Sisko faces the leader HUNTER.
--O'Brien is present:

SISKO
I'm Benjamin Sisko, commander of this station.
I understand you have a claim on this Tosk. What is his crime?

HUNTER
He is not a criminal. He is an animal bred for sport hunting.

SISKO
You hunt intelligent life?!

HUNTER
That is what his kind are for. You have no claim on him.
We demand that you turn him over to us at once.

O'BRIEN
If you'll excuse me, sir. I have work to get back to.

--and O'Brien walkz out into OPS, where the player GAINS CONTROL of him.

Kira in Ops:

KIRA
What's going on?

O'BRIEN
Those aliens from the wormhole, they're hunting Tosk for sport!

Dax in Ops:

O'BRIEN
Do you think the commander will let those Hunters take the Tosk?

DAX
Probably. He won't want to, but he doesn't have much choice.
The Prime Directive prevents interfering with alien cultures.

Sisko in his office (Hunter is present):

SISKO
Chief, we're busy. Can't this wait until later?

--The Hunter has nothing to say to O'Brien.

Note:When O'Brien passes in front of one particular kiosk in the Promenade, the status bar should appear saying "JUMJA VENDOR".

Jumja Kiosk (O'Brien facing it):

VENDOR
You haven't any money to buy jumja.

Bashir in the Infermary:

BASHIR
Something I can do for you, Chief?

O'BRIEN
Uh, no. Just dropped in to say "hello."

Jake in the Promenade:

O'BRIEN
Oh, hi, Jake.

JAKE
Hi, Chief.

Quark stands by the bar in his bar/casino:

O'BRIEN
Quark...know where I can get a security bypass module?

QUARK
You expect me to have access to something illegal?! I'm hurt!

O'BRIEN
Save it, Quark. I need one, and I need one now!

QUARK
Your Tosk friend, huh? Tell you what, you get me, say...
...100 gross of self-sealing stem bolts that I can trade...
...and I might be able to point you in the right direction.

Dabo Girl in Quark's:

DABO GIRL
Play a game, Chief?

O'BRIEN
Why not. What have I got to lose?

DABO GIRL
Dabo!

O'BRIEN
I won?!

DABO GIRL
Yes! One bar of gold pressed latinum! Play again?

O'BRIEN
No, I'll quit while I'm ahead, thanks.

Note: After this exchange, the Dabo Girl does not speak again.

Garak at the entrance to his shop:

GARAK
Chief. Do you know where I might obtain some yamok sauce?

O'BRIEN
Sorry, no.

GARAK
If you can find some for me, I'll make it worth your while.

The Klingon woman in the Promenade:

KLINGON WOMAN
tlhIngan Hol Dajatlh'a'

O'BRIEN
Sorry, I don't speak Klingon. Do you speak my language?

KLINGON WOMAN
Of course. I just prefer speaking klingonese.

Bajoran Monk at shrine:

MONK
You know the right path. Take it.

Odo in his office:

ODO
If you want to see the Tosk he's in the brig.

Also in security is a WEAPONS LOCKER. O'Brien can take a BAJORAN PHASER from it. But, if he attempts to exit into the Promenade, the WEAPONS ALARM sounds, and O'Brien stops in his tracks as Odo confronts him:

ODO
You know I don't allow weapons on the Promenade!
If you need a phaser, have Sisko tell me.

--and Odo TAKES the phaser away.

The Brig:
The first time O'Brien walks in, the program AUTOMATICALLY walks him to the Tosk's cell, which appears EMPTY.

O'BRIEN
Where'd he go?

The Tosk, who has been INVISIBLE, suddenly appears:
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TOSK
I am here, O-bri-en.

O'BRIEN
There are Hunters here. They want to take you back.
If you request asylum, the commander might let you stay.

TOSK
I can not. I am Tosk. it is my purpose to be hunted.
Help me, O-bri-en. Let me out of here, so I may die with dignity.

--this final line is ALL Tosk should say upon repeat visits.

Kai Opaka stands at the portholes on the Promenade's upper level:

OPAKA
I sense your loyalties are conflicted.
Do what you know is right.

The following dialogues occur only after O'Brien has obtained the items listed in or spoken to those named in bracketed boldface (i.e.-[jumja]).

The Klingon woman in the Promenade [Garak]:
Note: If O'Brien has not previously spoken to her, begin conversation with previous dialogue where she tells him she can speak "english."
(The Noh-Jay Consortium had been mentioned in an earlier section of this revision of the game design.)

O'BRIEN
Do you happen to know about a "Noh-Jay Consortium?"

KLINGON WOMAN
Ask the son of the commander.

Jake in the Promenade [Klingon Woman]:

O'BRIEN
Jake, do you know something about a "Noh-Jay Consortium"?

JAKE
That's Nog's and my business. "Nog" and "Jake": "Noh-Jay".
We've got 5,000 wrappages of yamok sauce, but can't sell it.
I guess the Cardassians have yamok sauce on their ship.

O'BRIEN
Tell you what, I'll take the yamok sauce off your hands.
I'll buy you all the jumja you want for a month for it. Deal?

JAKE
Deal! Get me one as downpayment and it's yours.

Jumja Kiosk (O'Brien facing it) [gold pressed latinum]:

O'BRIEN
I'd like to pay for a month's supply of jumja, for Jake Sisko.
And one to go.

VENDOR
Here you go, sir. That'll be...

O'BRIEN
Here's a bar of gold pressed latinum.
Keep the change!

Jake in the Promenade [jumja]:

JAKE
You got the jumja!
Here's the ownership chip for the crate of yamok sauce. Thanks!

O'BRIEN
The pleasure is all mine, Jake.

Garak at the entrance to his shop [chip for yamok sauce]:

O'BRIEN
I have here the ownership chip for a crate of yamok sauce.

GARAK
I am in your debt, sir!

O'BRIEN
It's yours for 100 gross of self-sealing stem bolts.

GARAK
Agreed! Shall I have these bolts delivered to your quarters?

O'BRIEN
No, send them to Quark, care of my name.

Quark stands by the bar in his bar/casino [Garak given yamok sauce]:

QUARK
I just heard those self-sealing stem bolts are being delivered.
Fast work! Ever thought of going into business with a ferengi?

O'BRIEN
No thanks, Quark. I did my part. What about your end of the deal?

QUARK
I just happened to 'find' a security bypass module.
I think some "criminal" dropped it in my bar. And, being the...
...respected "community leader" I am, I'll turn it over to you.

--and now O'Brien has the "key" to spring the Tosk.

The Brig. The Tosk in his cell: [security bypass module]

O'BRIEN
You need to turn invisible for me to get you out, Tosk.

The Tosk complies and becomes INVISIBLE:

O'BRIEN
Odo! Odo!

Odo hurries to O'Brien and sees the empty cell:

O'BRIEN
The Tosk has escaped! He isn't in his cell!

ODO
I'll find him! He won't get away!

Odo runs off. Tosk becomes VISIBLE when he's gone.
O'Brien shuts off the forcefield, freeing the Tosk:

O'BRIEN
This security bypass module will disable the weapons sensors...
...in the promenade, so I can get a phaser! Come on!

Odo's office [freed Tosk]:

O'BRIEN
I forgot to disable the weapons sensors!

--Once O'Brien has disabled the weapons sensors, the chase in on!

END OF PROMENADE 5

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